Thursday, February 4, 2010

Kiersten and Morgan's TSIS PA7

You, as part of the student body, could all agree that when it comes time for lunch and making a healthy decision you are limited in both time and choices. Sure, you could pay a ridiculous amount for about a serving of iceberg lettuce salad from the school’s cafeteria (which with dressing included still adds up to a high calorie meal) or visit one of the many fast food restaurants within miles of the campus. Zinczenko states this catastrophe perfectly in his essay when he says, “Drive down any thoroughfare in America, and I guarantee you'll see one of our country's more than 13,000 Mcdonalds restaurants. Now, drive back up the block and try to find someplace to buy a grapefruit.” In Radley Balko’s essay “What You Eat Is Your Business” he argues the exact opposite by stressing the importance of personal responsibility when dealing with weight issues. What Balko doesn’t seem to realize is that people with limited funds, time, choices, and transportation have a much more difficult time taking responsibility for their own body and what they should be eating. If Balko’s statement about personal responsibility is what obesity comes down to, John H. Banzhaf argues in his essay called “Lawsuits Against Fast-Food Restaurants Are an Effective Way to Combat Obesity” that there would then be a huge increase in other extremely risky personal behaviors. When in fact, there is no increase in other risky personal behaviors such as the use of illicit drugs, the failure to use seat belts, boating and rafting accidents, and accidental gunshots to be found. All of these authors agree on the fact that this is a major issue for Americans, but everyone has a different viewpoint on the deeper roots and causes behind it. We among many of the authors agree that the problem doesn’t lie completely in the hands of the individual. Whatever the case, something must happen in the near future to drastically change the path we’re on, or America is looking at a very sad and obese future.

8 comments:

  1. Kiersten and Morgan, while this piece makes excellent use of the essays we needed to deal with, it has a feel of being largely the ideas of others', without a great deal of opinion and ideas coming from you. i feel that you did an good job of discussing the failures in Balko's reasoning, using Banzhaf's essay to refute it. I felt that you changed your position on the issue during the course of the last couple sentences where you state that "the problem of obesity doesn't lie 'completely' in the hands of the individual." This doesn't go perfectly with your statement that "people with limited funds, time, choices, and transportation have a much more difficult time taking responsibility for their own body and what they should be eating." Both points are good, but could use some clarifying to unify them.

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  2. I liked how this group started off with a very good attention-getter, right off the bat they told me why I should be interested in what they had to write. I found it very true to me, personally, that being a college student, there is not really any time left in the day after class and work to make a home-cooked meal every night. The one part I would improve would be the introduction to the quote by John H. Banzhaf, I didn’t really understand what you where trying to say out of that quote. Maybe make it a little clearer about why you are using that quote in the paragraph. Good Work though!!

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  3. I really thought that this group had a strong opening statement; I felt that you gave us a reason to be interested and to continue reading. I will agree that as a college student it can be difficult between class and work to find the time to eat a decent meal, but not impossible. I think that you have really good points and are headed in the right direction, but I also noticed that you didn’t really have a firm opinion one way or the other. In the beginning you said that those who have “limited funds, time, choices, and transportation” have a difficult time taking responsibility for themselves. But near the end you claim that “the problem doesn’t lie “completely” in the hands of the individual.” Good job overall, but I could use a little more clarifying as to what your actual opinions are.

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  4. I have always felt that paying ridiculous prices for school food is not worth it. You made some awesome points, bring up the quote, "limited funds..." because if the prices were lower, I do believe that students would eat the better foood, but paying the "ridiculous amount for about a serving of iceberg lettuce salad from the school’s cafeteria," is not something that students are going to do. Over-all I thouhgt that the paragraph that you guys wrote was very well stated, but I think that had you included your personal views along with the quotes would have made it better.

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  5. I agree with with this when it says that sometimes it is a lot easier to just drive down the street then to try and find something healthy. I also agree on that fact that a lot of people are in hurry to get places, need to grab something and go, even some are just to lazy to make something healthy at home so they go out. I too agree that students would eat more at the school's cafiteria if they liked the food and/or wanted to pay the prices for it. You guys made some really good points!

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  6. Okay I agree with how you mentioned and reiterated that it is hard to choose a healthy choice when your qickest access to food is unhealthy and cheap and tastes good.But one thing that I think you could have defended more is why because we have easy access to unhealthy food is it okay for us to eat it? You gave us the scenario and showed us it was convenient but why is this the best choice?

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  7. After reading your post, I was a little lost on what exactly you were defending. You brought in other author's but never said that what they said was not true and that your's had the best ideas. I could see that you agreed that there are more McDonald's then there are places to buy "grapefruit," but you left that open ended. Also, you could suggest that the student body bag their own lunch and not only save money but stay healthy. Your debate had promise but kind of just stayed like that, with promise. Again, I was lost on what you were trying to defend.

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  8. I think your transition in essay was smooth. You went from talking about how your author is right and how the opposing author is wrong. I am not quite sure where your defense was, but it seem like you trying to get it across. Maybe a little more clarity on what you trying to defense. But I think you were headed in the right direction.

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